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    dots Submission Name: These Words.dots

    Author: BleedingTears
    ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 418/289/62
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       please tell me what you feel.

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    dotsThese Words.dots

    These words are forming in my throat,
    are on my tongue,
    end up rolling off my lips.
    I can't control it.
    It won't even stop.
    I'm tired of all these songs,
    singing about love and heartbreak,
    About suicide, death, and revenge.
    These songs about lust, drugs, and sex.
    Does anyone have a mind to speak these words?
    These words building in my heart,
    racing through my arm,
    ending in this ink.
    I'm tired of all these words we speak because we fear,
    to hear our own voice.
    We fear of what we really want to say.
    These words we speak with no meaning.

    Submitted on 2006-09-12 21:36:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this writing is true
    this is yet better than
    some of your other writing
    prompts. you did good...
    i sincerely agree with what
    you wrote... why are people
    like this we should be outgoing
    and not be afraid to speak freely
    yet mature like.

    <3 lelian
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Lelian Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great and very powerful, you have so many good points and I really wish you could get published; more people should be able to hear the kinds of things you have to say....it's really great (especially w/ how many self-proclaimed "poets" on this site refuse to be orignal.) to find someone who thinks for themself AND is a wonderful poet, I have read all of your stuff but I really need to get around to that sometime because you could honestly end up being one of my favorite poets on ES, none of your writing ever leaves me disappointed and I've always got a few more things to think about afterwards. I don't know how into AFI you are but this reminds me of a line from this time imperfect==="asphyxiate on words I would say, I'm drawn to a blackened sky as i turn blue." ignorance really isn't bliss.....and that kind of attitude from society in general leads people to become mindless conformists.
    great write,
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good. i like some of your other work a lot more but this is good. it doesnt stick to the norm...it says what a lot of us are thinking but dont want to say. keep it up.

    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem. It's trying to unvail everyones skeletons pretty much. You can tell even in people's writings that they are still holding back. Still afraid of hurting someones feelings. It's kind of sad, because even in writing, people still censor things.
    Good piece.

    Keep Writing.
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by Strator | [ Reply to This ]
      i got this feeling when i read this an exaple of it was i had a feeling that you were the lead singer of a band and the songs ou sing are depressing and longing for somthing but when its all said and done its means nothing to you.
    err uhh

    good one

    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]
      I think its a very clever write. I get what your trying to say...all the worthless words spoken in songs. I agree with you my friend. GBY!:)
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]

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