Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Out of sight..Out of mind


Author: lucianraven
ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il
Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49 /67 /19
Words: 112
Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
Total Views: 1292
Average Vote:    5.0000
Bytes: 775



Description:


I couldnt really think how to finish it... idk why it just ended anyway insanity beckons, and I have never heard such sweet music.....


Out of sight..Out of mind



To my friends it is over
My loved ones forget
My struggle to stop her
They'll quickly forget

But she isnt gone
She's never been stronger
She whispers to me
And every night longer

She tells me lies
She tells only truth
Why cut my arms?
When I have my thighs...

The red that is Running
The thrill of my cunning
My secret release
Once more mine to enjoy

I don't ask for judgement
Or pity, or guilt
Only for acceptance
In this world you have built

At some point they'll find out
It cannot be helped
But until then I'll keep writing
And riding it out....




Submitted on 2006-09-12 22:19:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  This poem is intense. Who is the "she" in the story? I feel your pain through this poem. It's a good write!

Stay strong
| Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by SOS33 | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



117840