Out of sight..Out of mind by lucianraven

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Author:	lucianraven
ASL Info:	21/M/Spfld Il
Elite Ratio:	3.46 - 49/67/19
Words:	112

Class/Type:	Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
Total Views:	651
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	775

Description:
I couldnt really think how to finish it... idk why it just ended anyway insanity beckons, and I have never heard such sweet music.....

Out of sight..Out of mind dots

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To my friends it is over
My loved ones forget
My struggle to stop her
They'll quickly forget

But she isnt gone
She's never been stronger
She whispers to me
And every night longer

She tells me lies
She tells only truth
Why cut my arms?
When I have my thighs...

The red that is Running
The thrill of my cunning
My secret release
Once more mine to enjoy

I don't ask for judgement
Or pity, or guilt
Only for acceptance
In this world you have built

At some point they'll find out
It cannot be helped
But until then I'll keep writing
And riding it out....

Submitted on 2006-09-12 22:19:16 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This poem is intense. Who is the "she" in the story? I feel your pain through this poem. It's a good write!

Stay strong
| Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by SOS33 | [ Reply to This ]

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