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    dots Submission Name: Out of sight..Out of minddots
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    Author: lucianraven
    ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49/67/19
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 651
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 775



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       I couldnt really think how to finish it... idk why it just ended anyway insanity beckons, and I have never heard such sweet music.....


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    dotsOut of sight..Out of minddots
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    To my friends it is over
    My loved ones forget
    My struggle to stop her
    They'll quickly forget

    But she isnt gone
    She's never been stronger
    She whispers to me
    And every night longer

    She tells me lies
    She tells only truth
    Why cut my arms?
    When I have my thighs...

    The red that is Running
    The thrill of my cunning
    My secret release
    Once more mine to enjoy

    I don't ask for judgement
    Or pity, or guilt
    Only for acceptance
    In this world you have built

    At some point they'll find out
    It cannot be helped
    But until then I'll keep writing
    And riding it out....




    Submitted on 2006-09-12 22:19:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is intense. Who is the "she" in the story? I feel your pain through this poem. It's a good write!

    Stay strong
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by SOS33 | [ Reply to This ]


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