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    dots Submission Name: My Big Mistakedots
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    Author: franki jorge
    ASL Info:    19/f/ca
    Elite Ratio:    0.82 - 5/12/54
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy Big Mistakedots
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    i cant take it
    she's so much stronger
    im afraid i wont last
    very much longer

    im such an asshole
    i cant even do this
    she's so fuckin smart
    she thinks im fuckin clueless

    and to tell you the truth
    i dont even know
    only he knew
    and me she didnt show

    i want to continue
    but i know i cant
    nobody approves
    not very much longer can i stand

    im doing it anymore
    im not gonna try
    i know i shouldnt give up
    but i just wanna die

    i've gone through this before
    you'd think that i'd learn
    but noone understands
    its love and trust i yearn

    its hard for me to trust
    and i have no more love
    the only person i loved
    is now up above :(

    my time is ticking
    and right now shes wasting it
    its not like i need her...
    or her dramatic shit

    so plez just end it
    for both of our sakes
    and just so you know
    you were just one big MISTAKE!!!




    Submitted on 2006-09-12 22:20:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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