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    dots Submission Name: A Cry For Helpdots
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    Author: franki jorge
    ASL Info:    19/f/ca
    Elite Ratio:    0.82 - 5/12/54
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 936
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    dotsA Cry For Helpdots
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    you cant see it can you?
    the face i hide behind
    the mask i wear is full of shit
    as you've come to find

    the people i've trusted
    just threw me away
    i've gotten so used to it
    now i just push my way

    the people at school dont get it
    becuz they cant see me
    i hide behind my twim
    people know her as Franki

    i hide behind my true self
    cuz im afriad
    of everything repeating again
    i dont like 'possesion of the state'

    i run and hide
    all day long
    and end up writing
    a poem or a song

    i wish someone would help
    me with this shit
    but noone will see
    that this face isnt it

    theres more to me
    than you'll ever know
    things i'd like to tell
    things i'd like to show

    but then again
    there is no hope
    so ill just try to find it
    cuz i dont wanna fuckin mope




    Submitted on 2006-09-12 22:30:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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