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    dots Submission Name: My angels truth...dots
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    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsMy angels truth...dots
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    To you...
    Love, Angel who I held so dear.
    My statue of imperfection,
    I thought so pure and angelic.
    Sweet, temptation..
    Swept you away in the winds of seduction.

    Lost you...
    Forever, entirely to the arms of a secret lover.
    In velvet candle light,
    The seeds of life planted.
    Secrets, born...
    Kept in the safe of your innocent face.

    Broken..
    Torn, angry demon I have become.
    Your words echoing endlessly,
    Through my shock shivering body.
    Four, words..
    Have riped apart my old self introducing insecurity...

    "Ry I am pregnant!"




    Submitted on 2006-09-12 23:44:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's intriguing in any sence of the word. It has a nice touch to it and it's creative. The expressions are excellent.
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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