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    dots Submission Name: It's your trophydots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157/295/173
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 888
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       I had a friend... a best friend in fact... but that was a long time ago now...


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    Well do you see me when you look at him?

    When you look at him,
    Do you see me?

    Do you think of me
    When you hold his hand?

    Do remember
    What it was like before him?

    It's all gone now
    Like a cheap whore
    drunk on cheap champaigne
    The dream we shared together
    it's long gone now

    When you look at me
    Do you notice it's not the same?

    All the cracks you made
    Are appearing in the concrete i paved

    Tell me what it's like
    to pick him over me
    cause i can tell you
    what it felt like me

    it was like 1000 knives
    stabbed my back
    and the blood i bled
    you captured in a glass
    like a trophy

    And to be truly honest
    to tell you the truth
    i thought you wouldn't

    i thought you woudn't

    but you did...




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