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    dots Submission Name: A Dark, Twisted Lullabydots
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    Author: Charles F Kane
    ASL Info:    34
    Elite Ratio:    1.43 - 4/17/14
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 844
    Average Vote:    3.6667
    Bytes: 867



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       A Dark kind of lullaby, not exactly what you want to sing to your kids.


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    dotsA Dark, Twisted Lullabydots
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    Sleep little Baby
    Sleep little one
    Your parents are all dead
    and all turned to bone

    Sleep little Baby
    Don't say a word
    God may buy you
    a mocking bird

    And if that bird
    hack out your eyes
    Angels gonna fly you
    Where the truths are lies

    So dream little baby
    That your mama lies
    in another mans bed
    as your daddy dies

    And your sister turning tricks
    And brother's sucking dicks
    Granny's using drugs
    And granddad's full of bugs

    So dream, little kid
    dream of a better day
    where you can live free
    and don't have to pray

    And if that better day
    doesn't quite appear
    Pray that you don't
    have to live in fear




    Submitted on 2006-09-13 05:12:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That is sick and twisted, I like it
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Lil_ Buddy | [ Reply to This ]
      very morbid...but i love it! it grossed me out just a bit...but it was brilliant. i wonder...how did you come up with this???
    -sam
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by bloddyrazorgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa this painted one creepy mental picture for me. good work. it had great imagry. keep em comin...
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      Kind of humorous and dark at the same time, but then I have a twisted mind,keep writing, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty good, only thing that stood out to me that you should change is "Where the truth are lies" I think it sounds better "Where the truth IS lies" But it's pretty good, keep up the work.
    D.C.M.
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by D.C.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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