soccer is fun

Author: Amberger ASL Info:    13/f/earth Elite Ratio:    1.9 - 49 /85 /24 Words: 81

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soccer is fun

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one day at the trailer me my brother and my cousin were playing soccer in the field and every time i kicked the ball my shoe flew off...so one time my shoe hit my brother in the head it so funny...not to him of course...i love playing soccer though its fun i was never on a soccer team though my parents would never sign me up....i mite play soccer this weekend though there isn't anyone my age to play it with

Submitted on 2006-09-13 06:17:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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What I like about your writes is that they always have a crystal clear message and also, they always tell a story that once you start reading, you have to finish. I enjoyed this Abbas

| Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]

hey ur poem/story or w/e it is, is very odd lol but i dunno kinda interesting lol keep writing though. Nick- Intarded

| Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]

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