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    dots Submission Name: Rennaissance & Ampersandsdots
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    Author: vintagepepper
    ASL Info:    21/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    7.05 - 191/153/46
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsRennaissance & Ampersandsdots
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    the shell will break
    & the light will pour in
    at some point in time,
    you will be enlightened.

    it is at that moment,
    that the two dimensional
    will melt & mold & sculpt its way
    into the the three dimensional world

    difficult to grasp with
    tiny, unknowing hands;
    it isn't easy, not a renaissance,
    not easy at all...

    but inevitable.
    the darkness will lift itself.
    all shadows of doubt will dissolve
    & we shall rise aloft the wings of knowledge




    Submitted on 2006-09-13 10:45:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Itís difficult to give thought on a ďmiscĒ type poem Ė Iím not sure of your intentions with it. You seem to be referring to personal development analogized to a bird egg? I have a little trouble with S3L3: ďit isn't easy, not a renaissance,Ē. Itís a bit awkward because two meanings are possible, not made clear until the next line. On the other hand, it gives it a natural voice. I suspect, this is the way you would speak in normal conversation. That makes me wonder if you have developed the ability to write in voices other than your natural one...just curious.
    As for ideas, I disagree. We donít arise on the wings of knowledge, but of understanding. But thatís the subject of another veeeeeeery long discussion.
    Overall, clever ideas, cleverly executed. I liked the poem, and I also like your punctuation Ė very precise. Most writers either avoid it or use it poorly.
    fred
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by fredmelden | [ Reply to This ]
      VP, your poetry is profound, and very talented. I really enjoyed this!
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... To live in Hope that life will get better. I have done that for the longest time. I have an Idea of what you are feeling, I believe. I have been following with your work, never really posting I don't think. I like it for the most part.
    | Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by destinedfallen | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a nice piece. i'm not a poet myself, but this i liked reading. just gave me a sense to move on, no matter waht. good work
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Dragonslayer | [ Reply to This ]


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