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    dots Submission Name: Echos in my Headdots

    Author: Suffer Well
    ASL Info:    36/F/East Coast
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 53/51/32
    Words: 357
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Eh, a reaction. Just some free verse.

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    dotsEchos in my Headdots


    A word used as a weapon.

    Days spent picking apart a shining spot
    that seemed to irritate your world.

    Don't do that, don't go there
    Don't be that, don't say that
    Don't be it

    I moved through life thinking I was winning the fight,
    the fight against regret and anger
    against fear and loneliness
    against judgement and resentment
    but I wasn't....

    All of it just hid in the recessess of my head
    Waiting for the day
    when it could echo my past to my present
    and turn my life upside down
    with it's unyielding torment

    All I ever heard was

    YOU didn't do this
    YOU didn't do that
    YOU went out to long
    YOU help too much
    YOU help too many

    Then the unspoken words, the silences
    They were loud and hurtful but denied
    Unending suspicion and harsh stares
    All for living life, for grasping it by the horns
    and wanting something from it

    Not satisfied to sit still
    Eager to taste dreams
    Desire to experience
    Ambition to try
    Not supported, stiffled and
    treated with contempt
    while years flew by

    The echos grew
    and their voice rings loud
    I can no longer ignore them
    or stuff them down

    Echos of pain and hurtful actions
    thundering through my heart and mind
    waiting for the time when they are put to rest

    Too bad they continue to grow
    Your inability to understand my pain
    causes me more pain and only adds to my burden

    Your inability to selflessly care
    Causes the echos to grow louder

    Your inability to suffer with your own echos
    causes me to bare two lives worth

    But you don't care
    You only know that you cannot bare
    The sound in your own head
    The silence of my now quiet and torn heart
    The screaming of what makes me ME

    Someday it will grow quiet
    you will have what you want
    I will be someone I do not want to be
    and those that loved me will mourn.....

    Submitted on 2006-09-13 11:33:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a wonderful write and a great example of free verse sounds like something that would go on in my mind its very moving and full of emotion in no way is there a trace of apathy to be found keep writing

    blood red angel
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by blood red angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow definetly a good free verse. It gets you hooked and reading till the end. It gets you fearing for the person, you dont want them to change. :) I dont know what to write, its so full of emotion, it just left me speechless. :) But its a great write. I really enjoyed it.

    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]

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