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    dots Submission Name: Humble Hero (totally redone)dots
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    Author: lili
    ASL Info:    23 a world of my own
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 1290/797/106
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 217
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 814



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       well i was not feeling like the last one i did was finished or showing the emotion that i wanted it to so with some help from magnolia steel i redid the whole thing let me know what you think and which one you like best. i belive that i hit the nail on the head with what i wanted to say with this one.


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    dotsHumble Hero (totally redone)dots
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    Humble Hero

    Mothers, Fathers,
    Sons and daughters…
    Courageously,
    You fight for our freedom.
    With the heart of a lion,
    Fierce and brave.
    Selflessly leaving behind
    All you know and love.

    You do this for us
    So the river of hope,
    For a safe future
    Can keep flowing strong.
    Ant our children’s children
    Never know devastation
    Like the crumbling twin towers,
    except in history books.

    Appreciation,
    For what you do
    Spreads like wild flowers.
    Tears run like water falls,
    with every departure.
    Loved ones rejoice,
    With each return and embrace.
    You are a humble hero!

    Thanks for all you do stateside and afar




    Submitted on 2006-09-13 12:05:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is very good i really like it just as much as the other one this one is very very good i say it deserves a five thank you for welcoming me the site
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by blood red angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey

    First of all I would like to thank you for your lovely comments on my poem „tale of a rose", I am glad you like it.
    Now to your poem. I read both of them I must say this one is better. The other one is also good, but this one has more flow and emotions. The message is very clear. As a poem or an artistic work it is outstanding.

    For me, I mean personally, soliders are not heros. It is just my personal view.
    A very emotional and heartfelt work.

    Well done
    With love sanam
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this. Very good.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by junemarie | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This was very good! I read this and just completely feel your words and see the images so much better as appose to the original poem. I think you have caputred what you where trying to say in a very vivid and poetic way. This is a fav of mine now. You did a great job.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]



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