In the first place, what draws me into your page is your name "wolverine".
About the poem, the title commands the reader and all of a sudden it gives you the idea on what you're gonna get. So I think it was perfect for the piece. And the lines did not disappoint me at all. This is a snapshot on one's life, the feeling contained is expressed very well. " life in the cell" that was just great.
I wish I have more constructive to say but this is well-written.
Good job here;-)
Anyway, the piece: I liked your third line "bars where nobody drinks". Though I have heard it before, I can't help but acknowledge it as a brilliant line.
Overall, you depressed me. :( Not in a bad way, you put me right where I was identifying with a situation I have never been in. THAT takes talent. You continue to take simple things and turn it into a work or art for me.
I have enjoyed everything I have read from you so far, so please: KEEP WRITING!
can't really say that i know what thats like, but your write really put me there. i feel trapped in my own life. is that what you're really talking about. thats what i really like about this. it can be used in the literal sense, and just about any way you want it to be. very flexible, and an awsome write
wow that was really nifty. All the wordplay on bars and cells, so neat. :) I like how you repeated 8 by 10, it kept you remembering the gest of the poem and how it really is. Really good poem, so interesting.