Description: i guess this is kind of a follow up of "*Why?"....i need help with a title though so if u have any suggestions go ahead and dont hesitate to help out thanx
*Engulfed In Betrayal -------------------------------------------
You're with me,
But you love her.
You won't tell me.
But I know,
Will you ever tell me,
How you really feel?
Is our relationship
Based on a lie?
I tell you everything,
You tell me what you think I want to hear.
Does that seem fair to you?
Don't protect me,
I can take care of myself!
I did before you came along
And I can after!
I can't stand it!
My life can't be built on a lie!
I can't live like this anymore!
Good point here. I am glad that you showed you charters strenght rather than weekness. You had the relationship end when it needed too. Most of the time a person can see it but is not strong enough to take the step and let go.
Some nice rhythm to this. You don't have to rhyme and I would prefer this kind of writing to "rumtitimtitum" Then, again, the rhyming doe not have to be absolutely rhythmical does it? Another commenter picked up on "It's Over" so that might be a title for you. Donald
that hurts me just to read this. not quite, but im somewhat in the same boat. i just don't know if im being lied to , or what. i can see that you have strenght, when u said ,..."it's over" i have no strength for that. i admire you