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    Author: riki_nl
    ASL Info:    20/M/NL
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 20/18/6
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Promise me
    You wont take me alive
    I wanna live as long as I can
    My strength is freedom

    I can't take you
    Feeling so down
    It's all my fault
    Shouldve seen it all




    Submitted on 2006-09-13 18:00:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this sounds like a poem after a break up. sad and expressfull. Dark yet full of emotion. reminds me alot of my poetry in a sense. it's short and sweet.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Solitary Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this is really good so far .... i like ur style of writing .. i hope to read more from u ....
    i cant wait to reqad this when it is finished ... let me know when it is
    ~Caotic~

    P.S.~ i hope u are enjoying this site it has a lot of talented writers on it
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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