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    dots Submission Name: A suffering Minddots

    Author: Poetic Ways
    Elite Ratio:    1.31 - 9/24/26
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       A teacher at my school told me to write a poem...he wrote the word chaotic and said use that in ur first line the rest have to rhyme wit it

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    dotsA suffering Minddots

    So many things gone wrong, and now a mind with thoughts chaotic,
    These pains your feeling wont leave, need an escape, a mental narcotic,
    Then the misery and agony take over causing thoughts with a nature exotic,
    So the evil temptations being pushed into my mind taking over, becoming despotic,
    So now you have actions being pressured by thoughts, and outcomes with decisions idiotic,
    A raging sensation of failure within yourself and a sudden mentality of something close to psychotic,
    So this mind is infectious, and a cure is not being searched for, There is no emotional antibiotic,
    However a mental disaster, a mental suicide, a mental relief... A permenant change, a mind forever gone and a lonliness with a spell of pure hypnotic!

    Submitted on 2006-09-13 20:19:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i really like this

    <3 Brittaney-Mae
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]

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