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A suffering Mind

Author: Poetic Ways
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A teacher at my school told me to write a poem...he wrote the word chaotic and said use that in ur first line the rest have to rhyme wit it

A suffering Mind

So many things gone wrong, and now a mind with thoughts chaotic,
These pains your feeling wont leave, need an escape, a mental narcotic,
Then the misery and agony take over causing thoughts with a nature exotic,
So the evil temptations being pushed into my mind taking over, becoming despotic,
So now you have actions being pressured by thoughts, and outcomes with decisions idiotic,
A raging sensation of failure within yourself and a sudden mentality of something close to psychotic,
So this mind is infectious, and a cure is not being searched for, There is no emotional antibiotic,
However a mental disaster, a mental suicide, a mental relief... A permenant change, a mind forever gone and a lonliness with a spell of pure hypnotic!

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