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    dots Submission Name: revolutionary theory (verse 3)dots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 934
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsrevolutionary theory (verse 3)dots
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    The revolution wont occur from living in seclusion
    Or advocating the white from black evolution
    Destroying your delusions with this lyrical execution
    Life in this institution is much better than living in destitution
    The press is shooting, taking pictures of agony and pain
    Got rid of the segregation but the parody still remains
    Our sense of direction is actually the same
    Hitting different subjects accurately when I aim
    We gotta make sacrifices if were expecting a change
    Trying to pacify us because the truths were selecting are outta their range
    They tantalize us, the points were connecting are strange
    The bastards defy trust, hiding oral erections were calling fangs
    Dispersing the darkness just like a sunrise
    Imagining Gods pride when He saw his only Son rise
    Look into your sons eyes
    And tell him the truth is that some lie
    And that the reward for playing with glocks is a gun prize
    If you call women bitches how do they become wives?
    Being positive has become overrated
    Pessimism gets generated, destroyed, and we regenerate it as hope
    Climbing the slope only to lose out hold on the rope
    Then we fall into deprivation
    Its a celebration for freedom fighters
    Words are deceitful so were not believing writers
    Searching for the Holy Grail and choosing the right cup
    Orating, inspiring the masses as Im holding the right up




    Submitted on 2006-09-13 23:19:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dude, that's some deep [censored]. I enjoyed the wordage and the message you giving out. I think you going political on me. Nahh, you touched on a lot of subjects that people are to scared to even think of, much less write about. I really enjoyed all 3 of them troy, good job
    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      Whatup. thanks for the comments u gave on my writes....despite that, ur writing has substance, creativity, and Im glad to see someone who seems to take thier writings seriously. I havent been able to focus and get in depth on one subject as you have, but this piece was inspiring. Stay creative.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Logic | [ Reply to This ]
      this left me speechless..i absolutly love it ...i read your stuff and i feel this is the type of writings that could make people change ...think...feel...make people want to make things right.....anyway very well done!

    AL
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Your poems are always very realistic and they sound quite like my Sociology lectures in colledge but more artistic of course. Your rhyming is flawless, you always know what's your point and your message.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very good. Just as powerful, if not more then the second one. I loved this. It seem you got more agressive with the lyrics and tone. I loved the message, of how we may not be segrgated, but some things never change. And how N.O. is like a photographer dreams. These lines were tight and I just loved the flow. Great work candyman.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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