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    dots Submission Name: My last letterdots
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    Author: Duke Medhat
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    5.08 - 58/38/24
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1178
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    Bytes: 684



    Description:
       My last (un-sent) message to her ..........


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    dotsMy last letterdots
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    You are the most beautiful girl
    I had ever saw
    You are the most beautiful creature
    God can create
    You are the only perfect
    Creature on Earth

    I failed to win your heart
    I know, but...
    My love for you is immortal
    It is a powerful dragon
    Nothing can kill him - even I -
    But I can make it asleep

    O my angelet
    I do not want to see you again
    When I see you
    You awaken that mighty dragon
    Then start to burn my heart

    My sweet, I will never forget you
    I can never kill that dragon
    But life has to go on
    So, let that dragon asleep




    Submitted on 2006-09-14 05:39:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is an incredibbly deep write
    You have so much Love for this person and it seems she is not returning it and in fact has left you to stand alone
    I would only say use the lessons you learned from this relationship to better yourself in finding a new Love
    Do not give up
    Love is a strange thing it comes when we least expect it
    God Bless
    Ron

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    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmm interesting.
    I never heard love compared to a dragon in such a way before.
    This is good.
    Keep Writing
    And I hope that everything works out for you and your heart remains as more then ashes.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]


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