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    dots Submission Name: Oh solitude!dots
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    Author: vitoko
    ASL Info:    24/M
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 690/442/104
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1026
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       kidna depressed and this is for solitude


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    dotsOh solitude!dots
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    Oh solitude!
    You are the calm in my passions
    You gave me the skill to dream about her
    When I only have her fragrant in the reality.

    Oh sad mate,
    Make me remember the birth of love
    to stop these tears full of pain.
    Because the death is upon my faded roses.

    And who am I to ask you what love is?
    If you hate love, because due to it, men come to you
    And are covered by your arms,
    which ran away from you days ago to find LOVE




    Submitted on 2006-09-14 12:05:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked it. I tink it is the first I read from you, maybe not, but I don't know. I did like it though. I don't really know how to describe why I liked it, probably the flow, the fact that every stanza began with oh, .... , and umm...ya overall goodness. Awesomeness and keep writing.
    ~Caotic~
    And thanks for the comments
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      very different to my style of writing/expressing emotions
    it was poetic yes and sweet
    It was unique
    Keep em coming
    God Bless

    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      ooh, this is real nice. this is the kind of beauty we all try to express with our words.
    i can't find anything wrong in this, the use of words is great, the flow is good, i cannot pick at this at all.

    'You gave me the skill to dream about her
    When I only have her fragrant in the reality.'
    this is so very beautiful.

    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Vic
    I like this one
    This is another strong write from you that reminded me just how good your poetry can be
    I missed hearing from you
    I hope everything is going well for you
    Please keep in touch
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      well, i like the image you have going here but the last stanza didnt really make sense to me. ive re-read it a couple times and still dont understand. doesnt mean it's not good, just that it didn't hit home with me. good poem though. a lot less grammical errors. nice work.
    Holy xx
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Holy Wood | [ Reply to This ]
      okies i love giving long ass comments lets see how i do with this....

    This i thought was a peacful poem. It reminds me of work done by shakespear (its a compliment i dont know why but some people get offended when they are compared to famouse poets)

    Now the poem has its elements of sadness to it. What i think (mind you if im not correct i am really sorry) again what i think is it is about lost or losing hope in a certain situation.

    What confused me is your last line...if its not to much can you please send me a PM so i may understand this a bit more?

    well with the little bit i do understand i have tried to give justice to overall i love this poem.

    all the love
    nikki

    *kisses*
    | Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]


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