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    dots Submission Name: The Navigatordots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
    Total Views: 552
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 514



    Description:
       Pure impulse. I think I might disinherit this one :-)


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    dotsThe Navigatordots
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    My millenia
    My children of thunder
    My open eclipse
    My bridges of wonder
    My dragonbone tears
    My essence of smoke
    My cradle of fears
    My magic awoke
    My turbulent skies
    My biddance to ice
    My reason to bear
    My beautiful vice
    My satin of future
    My only retreat
    My damascus rose
    My heart that won’t beat
    My ancor within
    My crusade and war
    My fall of belief
    That there is no more




    Submitted on 2006-09-14 13:59:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am not sure what to think of this on to tell you the truth I understand what it is trying to say but personally I can't get over the word ME being used over and over repeating things is something I really dislike in any form of writing or verbal.

    But thats just me and it is yours
    and if your happy with it then so be it.

    ~shawn

    P.S. other then that I liked it
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Porcelaine,

    This is great.

    I see one mistake but I wouldn't dare to speak a negative sounding word to you anymore; afraid as I am for a virtuel lashing.

    Love you,

    roberto

    P.s. I've celebrated my 108th birthday two days ago.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by roberto | [ Reply to This ]


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