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    dots Submission Name: Your Goodbyedots

    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       love sucks :(

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    dotsYour Goodbyedots

    I look at you,
    your eyes telling me
    the words your lips refuse too.
    I see everything,
    I can read the signs.
    You are already gone…
    in your heart, soul and mind.
    Your body remains
    trying to be kind.
    The pain so intense,
    tears flowing free.
    You left me a long time ago
    but my eyes refused to see…
    refused to believe.
    My heart reaching for you
    with arms of its own.
    My soul begging to be touched
    by someone it’s known for so long.
    The finality is there,
    set deep in your eyes.
    Your heart is gone,
    you no longer hear my cries.

    Submitted on 2006-09-14 15:50:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow thats so touchin..it was really nice..i have felt that way before thats for sure..good read
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by DeathsWife | [ Reply to This ]
      My heart reaching for you
    with arms of its own.

    that was pretty good imagery and personification. this one was good but it made me pretty sad that somebody could just ignore a person who cares about them so much. it just goes to show how much people risk when they take a chance at romance. if u never try to love u live a shallow existence. but if u love and lose u may end up with a broken heart that takes far too long to heal.
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      your poem is so sad, and i dont no if its true or not but i do not like the boy in the poem, he sounds fake like he cant handle real emotions. your poem is touching because ive been there b4 but never relly knew how to handle it. adding this to my favs. goodluck.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, how this plays upon my feelings about my husband, who I worry that I have lost although we will remain together, because of my deep love for him. I feel a distance and a loss of feeling from him, and can definitely relate (although we will stick it out, till my goodbye because he wants it all including his dedication to our son). The choice is mine to make, I know, it is set up that way. I don't know... good write, thanks for sharing, shalini
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
      I hope this is fiction, because this poem makes me wanna give you something for the pain. I hate to see or read about people breaking up.
    The poem is not as smooth as I would like to see it, but its painful all the same.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

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