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    dots Submission Name: Choose Your Poisondots

    Author: junemarie
    ASL Info:    62,F, Port Richey, Fl.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 66/70/27
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Misc/Society
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    dotsChoose Your Poisondots

    I'm addicted to your love my love
    I'm addicted to your touch
    You're more to me than heaven above
    And I need you oh so much.

    I'm addicted to your smile my love
    I'm addicted to your voice
    And even if push should come to shove
    You're still my drug of choice.

    You've taken my heart and torn it apart
    You've made me cry so often
    Yet you can mend this battered heart
    With words so falsely spoken.

    To leave you now would be to me
    Like tearing off my arms
    And I haven't the will to set myself free
    Of your all too treacherous charms.

    I've given up my life to be
    The part of you unknown
    But even when you hold me close
    I feel so all alone.

    For you can never give me
    What isn't yours to give
    And I can never hope to be
    The reason why you live.

    I've got to break this habit
    Someday, someway, somehow
    I've got to get myself back
    The time to start is now.

    I've got to say goodbye to you
    Though it may break my heart
    I've got to make my life anew
    And make a brand new start.

    And if in the process of finding myself
    I leave you far behind
    Then that's your chance to find yourself
    So you're no longer blind.

    And in the end it's going to be
    The way it's meant to be
    No longer need I live in you
    I'll be addiction free!

    Submitted on 2006-09-14 16:13:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's as if you have read my mind. i can relate completely to this.
    your poem flows perfectly, and each stanza just moulds right into the next. i think this is a wonderful piece.
    i'm addin this to my favs.
    great work.
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      goes to show ya that addiction can be in many forms, love, drugs, ... yadda yadda. this poem is well and speciafically written, but at the same time, it could be about anything... good job.
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by Cherub Winter | [ Reply to This ]
      i truly love your poem, ive never really read one quite like this. i love how you start off talking about how you could never leave him and then it changes and you realize you can leave him. wonderfully written and i love the use of words <3ash
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      I am addicted to my husband, and endure the suffering because I feel like I need him, although I know I don't. My dedication is too strong to let go of him, and can relate sooooo much. Thanks for sharing, shalini
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
      line 18 i think you shoud be your. i think that it is a great idea and a good write but i think you could use a little more imagry in it. all in all good work.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]

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