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Choose Your Poison


Author: junemarie
ASL Info:    62,F, Port Richey, Fl.
Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 66 /70 /27
Words: 269
Class/Type: Misc /Society
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Choose Your Poison



I'm addicted to your love my love
I'm addicted to your touch
You're more to me than heaven above
And I need you oh so much.

I'm addicted to your smile my love
I'm addicted to your voice
And even if push should come to shove
You're still my drug of choice.

You've taken my heart and torn it apart
You've made me cry so often
Yet you can mend this battered heart
With words so falsely spoken.

To leave you now would be to me
Like tearing off my arms
And I haven't the will to set myself free
Of your all too treacherous charms.

I've given up my life to be
The part of you unknown
But even when you hold me close
I feel so all alone.

For you can never give me
What isn't yours to give
And I can never hope to be
The reason why you live.

I've got to break this habit
Someday, someway, somehow
I've got to get myself back
The time to start is now.

I've got to say goodbye to you
Though it may break my heart
I've got to make my life anew
And make a brand new start.

And if in the process of finding myself
I leave you far behind
Then that's your chance to find yourself
So you're no longer blind.

And in the end it's going to be
The way it's meant to be
No longer need I live in you
I'll be addiction free!




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  it's as if you have read my mind. i can relate completely to this.
your poem flows perfectly, and each stanza just moulds right into the next. i think this is a wonderful piece.
i'm addin this to my favs.
great work.
whirl**
| Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  goes to show ya that addiction can be in many forms, love, drugs, ... yadda yadda. this poem is well and speciafically written, but at the same time, it could be about anything... good job.
| Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by Cherub Winter | [ Reply to This ]
  i truly love your poem, ive never really read one quite like this. i love how you start off talking about how you could never leave him and then it changes and you realize you can leave him. wonderfully written and i love the use of words <3ash
| Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  I am addicted to my husband, and endure the suffering because I feel like I need him, although I know I don't. My dedication is too strong to let go of him, and can relate sooooo much. Thanks for sharing, shalini
| Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
  line 18 i think you shoud be your. i think that it is a great idea and a good write but i think you could use a little more imagry in it. all in all good work.
Lia
| Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]


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