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    dots Submission Name: Impossible to forgetdots

    Author: Charles F Kane
    ASL Info:    34
    Elite Ratio:    1.43 - 4/17/14
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 748
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Two lonely souls. A random meeting

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    dotsImpossible to forgetdots

    Hard to remember
    but impossible to forget
    that what was she were
    one lonely girl I met
    one night in the park
    longing for attention
    wanting some love
    some affection
    just some affection

    She laid her head
    on my shoulder
    never said her name
    I stroked her neck
    smelled her hair
    the sweetness
    of her long black hair

    As we sat there
    in this autumn-cold park
    the night wandered on
    around us under the moon
    We were two lonely souls
    Two ships passing in the night
    We kissed, her lips
    were hungry and warm

    Suddenly she stood up
    and ran away into the night
    I watched as she ran
    down the street
    The darkness swallowed her
    and I never saw her again

    This nameless girl
    I would never meet again
    Yet I would never ever
    forget, never forget
    But sometimes I find
    that she can be hard
    to remember still

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