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    dots Submission Name: 14 years old and drunkdots
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    Author: Charles F Kane
    ASL Info:    34
    Elite Ratio:    1.43 - 4/17/14
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 888
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 713



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    dots14 years old and drunkdots
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    Just 14 years old
    She fills herself up
    with bad moonshine
    for the weekend
    She thinks she's hot
    stumbling on the street
    cough-smoking menthols
    she stole from her mama

    First taste of adult-life
    steals her childhood blind
    "Cool" she says and
    pukes in the gutter
    drunk as a skunk
    she falls asleep

    Soon she's picked up
    by a cop on patrol
    driven home dirty
    She'll wake up tomorrow
    to a headache and
    frantic parents
    She won't care much
    Rebel without a cause
    14 years old and drunk
    but not on life.





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