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    dots Submission Name: Sitting Alone.dots
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    Author: icaughtfire591
    ASL Info:    16/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75/74/39
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       this was on one of those days.


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    dotsSitting Alone.dots
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    Sitting here on the phone with you,
    I wish I wasn’t so depressed.
    I want to explode, but I try to hold back
    Because I know you don’t need this.

    There are just too many thoughts,
    Piled up and compressed in my mind.
    I understand that I deserve this hurt,
    But the Redeemer must have been behind.

    Like powdered glass, the seconds now
    Slip through my bloody hands,
    And every minute that I’m here
    With my thoughts are tormented plans.

    The worst besides the thinking
    Is waiting; endless and unknown
    For the time I can again spend with you,
    The only one who I have shown…

    All the anguish I have felt,
    My morosely shapen mold,
    This unwanted constant sorrow,
    And parts of this soul that I have sold.

    Sitting here on the phone with you,
    I wish I wasn’t so depressed.
    I want to explode, but I choke on my cries
    Because I know you need some rest.

    And still you hear the pain tear out of me
    In muffled sobs over the phone,
    Say, “Please don’t cry, Sabrina,” so sadly
    And I clench my jaw shut;

    It breaks my heart to be alone.




    Submitted on 2006-09-15 06:39:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this. I can relate to this and how you want to tell somebody about how you feel, but you dont really want to burden them with your pain and problems. That's the way I see this poem. It kind of makes me sad when reading it knowing that the person is going to bottle up their feelings though. I can understand the alone part at the end because in a sense you are alone because nobody knows what you are feeling but yourself so you are alone with your problems. Enjoyed reading this work!
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by sweetxoxosorrow | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutely love "
    The worst besides the thinking
    Is waiting; endless and unknown
    For the time I can again spend with you,
    The only one who I have shown…" It's just something that I can releate to and waiting is the worst part of anything. I don't think this poem needs anything to be changed. I really like it, it has all the lelments of a great poem, or wait it could use one thing...why do you hate being alone? That is one thing I would let the readers in on so they aren't left in the dark for too long.
    Krystina
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]


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