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    dots Submission Name: Choke Me.dots
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    Author: icaughtfire591
    ASL Info:    16/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75/74/39
    Words: 500
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 782
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3125



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       i heard 'the kill' and wrote this.


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    dotsChoke Me.dots
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    If I was to break
    Right in front of you,
    What would you do?

    If I was to die...
    In your arms as
    I lie tonight,
    What would you do?

    Would you save me?
    Would you choke me?
    Pull these heartstrings tighter
    Around my throat
    And scream
    “How could you leave me?”

    If I was to take a gun,
    Put it to my head,
    Would you stop me?
    Would you join me?

    If I was to just give up,
    Say “our hope is dead”
    Would you hold me?
    Would you disagree?
    Say “this is the end”
    Would you lie to me?
    Would you fucking lie to me then?

    Would you save me?
    Would you choke me?
    Wrap your hands tighter
    Around my throat
    And pull?
    Trigger me into death,
    My coffin is full.
    MY COFFIN IS ALREADY FULL.

    Come on, do it for me now.
    Show me if you care.
    Make it quick and painless,
    Or kill me slow as I can bear.
    Show me if you love me
    Or tell me why your hate is so
    Or let me rest in pieces knowing
    That you wouldn’t look back if I chose to go.

    I need to know…

    Would you save me?
    Would you choke me?
    Wrap your arms tighter
    Around myself,
    Then leave me?
    Like you did last time?
    Test how fucked up I can be.
    Wrap your hands tighter…
    My body froze.
    Yes, I remember how you squoze,
    Like so many others before.

    Yet my misshapen heart still grows.
    It lives; it bleeds, but on it goes…

    Would you save me?
    Would you choke me?
    Wrap your hands tighter
    Around my throat and pull…
    Please, I’m too weak and you’re too strong,
    So me for this once, be brave.
    Pull the trigger so I can finally go
    Rest with my broken soul in the grave.

    If you were to break
    Right in front of me,
    What would I do?

    Would I be selfish again?
    Just like we always are?
    Would I refuse to see our end
    While the beginning’s still so far?
    Who am I really doing this for?
    I’m a hypocrite like you are.
    Is this for you, for me or…

    Would I save you?
    Would I choke you?
    Pull these heartstrings tighter
    Around your throat
    And scream
    “How could you hurt me?
    You know how your hurt kills me.
    But I’ll try to fix you again.
    It’s myself that I can’t mend.
    Please try to fix me again.
    This cannot be the end.”

    I would do anything for you…
    I would do everything for you.

    If I was to break
    Right in front of you,
    What would you do?

    Would you save me?
    Would you choke me?
    Pull my heartstrings tighter
    Around my throat
    And scream
    “You can’t just leave me.”

    Yes, that’s what you would do.
    …What I would do for you.




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    ||| Comments |||
      This piece, was good. I can relate with you on these questions. It seems that the supposed greatest thing that we as humans can feel, can be the greatest downfall that we have. Go figure, huh?
    Keep up the writes and I hope that you can find some sort of comfort in life. We all search.

    peace
    Semper.
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Semper Fidelis | [ Reply to This ]


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