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    dots Submission Name: Tears/No Tearsdots
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    Author: diamonds_2_dust
    ASL Info:    15/m/Eugene Oregon
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 105/161/35
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 147
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    Description:
       i cant really take all the credit for this song... my dad wrote this (and i revised some of it) back before he died... it was kind of scary opening a little envalope of his songs, and the first one says "It's been lonely here in paradise without you"... seeng how he's dead... like he saw it coming...


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    IT's been lonely here in paradise without you
    even though, you know, it's such a lovely view
    you're just around the corner of the sky
    but i'd trade this paradise
    ... just to hold you by my side...

    I used to be like you
    i used to feel that way too
    you're lying shattered and broken on the floor
    you'll make it through, I've been there before
    and i'll hold your hand the whole way through
    if you fall... i'll be right there to catch you...




    Submitted on 2006-09-15 12:11:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it. I don't think it sounds finished though. Maybe try adding a bit more to it. But i understand if you dont ant to add more and potentially wreck what your dad wrote. great write.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      As a songwriter, I have to say there is great imagery and sentiment in this write. There is a universal appeal to the words that anyone would appreciate. Thank you for sharing this write. It must have taken quite a lot of thought and courage to be so vulnerable.
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]



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