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My Major Love

Author: sravenlyn
ASL Info:    17/f/NJ
Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 21 /58 /67
Words: 94
Class/Type: Poetry /BrokenHeart
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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My Major Love

The major love of my life
The one that made me think of being his wife
The guy the stole my heart and ran away
The guy I loved and still do to this day

He lied
And over that I cried
He brain-washed me to believe his every word
And I gave him the brain-washing cord

I think of him everyday
The memory of him just wont go away
He is like a STD I dont know about until it shows
But it get worst because everyone knows

Submitted on 2006-09-15 23:54:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i no how that is love hurts just plane old sux ass lol <3
| Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
  i agree that it could be longer, with a topic like this, so much more could be said.
but what you have written is good. this is the perfect example of how 'love hurts'.
| Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  I wish it were longer. So maybe think about lengthening it. Other than that, it's very "from the heart". I can't say it wasn't my favorite and you can punch me if you want. But it's the truth. Just think about maybe creating more flow and more descriptions. I like the idea of the poem though. The last stanza was the best.
| Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Itzmeemiflee | [ Reply to This ]

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