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    dots Submission Name: Passion Lost Persistencedots
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    Author: Rask
    ASL Info:    17/female/Canada...
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 56/34/14
    Words: 23
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 822
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 207



    Description:
       Another short one... this one has a little more flow in terms of meaning to it. Enjoy.


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    dotsPassion Lost Persistencedots
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    Passion Lost Persistence

    Delicacy torn,
    through tissue and chambers;
    feeble fingers work thin thread
    to save our eclipse.
    Thoughtless journeys,
    forever after




    Submitted on 2006-09-16 00:11:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Kind of reminded me of your soul being lost? I liked this short but sweet poem.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm...sounds like random thoughts erupting into words that mean something.

    Delicately torn through tissue and chambers, signify that your slow being torn like tissue, fragie.

    Feeble fingers work thin thread to save our eclipse, means that the thread of life is being spun, only finding that eventually it falls into darkness.

    Thoughtless journeys,forever after, means floating endlessly, for eternity, not alive nor are you dead. Passion has lost its persistence, things that once brought forth emotions no longer mean a thing.

    Simply there for beings who float and become lost.

    Well, just an odd opinion. Nice, it makes you think.

    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]


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