Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Passion Lost Persistence


Author: Rask
ASL Info:    17/female/Canada...
Elite Ratio:    8 - 56 /34 /14
Words: 23
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 942
Average Vote:    4.0000
Bytes: 207



Description:


Another short one... this one has a little more flow in terms of meaning to it. Enjoy.


Passion Lost Persistence



Passion Lost Persistence

Delicacy torn,
through tissue and chambers;
feeble fingers work thin thread
to save our eclipse.
Thoughtless journeys,
forever after




Submitted on 2006-09-16 00:11:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  Kind of reminded me of your soul being lost? I liked this short but sweet poem.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm...sounds like random thoughts erupting into words that mean something.

Delicately torn through tissue and chambers, signify that your slow being torn like tissue, fragie.

Feeble fingers work thin thread to save our eclipse, means that the thread of life is being spun, only finding that eventually it falls into darkness.

Thoughtless journeys,forever after, means floating endlessly, for eternity, not alive nor are you dead. Passion has lost its persistence, things that once brought forth emotions no longer mean a thing.

Simply there for beings who float and become lost.

Well, just an odd opinion. Nice, it makes you think.

| Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



118323