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    dots Submission Name: bloom-withereddots
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    Author: LadyMerlina
    ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60/93/58
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 866
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 735



    Description:
       It has no structure. And IF you read it right, it rhymes. Based on that, it's trash...
    But the contents still make me *blush*. You might too

    Ginny


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    dotsbloom-withereddots
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    A love gone unfinished
    I wanted no flesh untouched, un-kissed.

    A longing, a hunger
    That's still there,
    In the pit of me.

    To bloom around you
    Instead it rots and turns sour
    Once sweet, now bitter.

    But your light brightens my every dark corner

    Your touch eases the pain into pleasure
    it soothes me and feeds my hunger
    It gets hard to hold back and resist
    So I let my guard down and all my defenses.

    You rock me still and steady
    While your tongue and kisses
    search and conquer.

    I let you toy with my senses
    It stops me from feeling withered
    And defenseless.




    Submitted on 2006-09-16 07:26:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I be alittle more basic, I like this poem.
    I makes me wanna go out and get lucky!
    With this poem on my mind, I think I could get luck almost every time. To feed the passionate hunger & drive in other words the feel satisfied.
    This is a great poem.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Very passionate, very expressive and brilliant. I like the fire in this poem, it blends perfectly into the theme. This is excellent. I rarely ever have the chance to read something like this here.
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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