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Two Thoughts - One Day


Author: beatthedrum
ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
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Words: 306
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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These were written within minutes of each other. They are saying different things , but sping from the same source.


Two Thoughts - One Day



We are the wallflowers
Waiting, wondering,
And weeping

Watching the men
Waltzing with war
They love to be seen
With her on their arm
But they will never know
A truly secure home
Unless they are willing
To give peace a dance

We are the wallflowers
Waiting, wondering,
And weeping

Our peace lacks the glamour
Or celebrity of war
And therefore often
gets ignored.
But can make you happy
Given half a chance
All we are saying is
Give peace a dance

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Conversations

There is a language of love
that has no words and no touch
except for a gaze that carries
light to the depth of the well
and reflects on the smooth surface
of sweet water.

What is seen
is that which is looking.
I pray that we may
communicate
in that way
today.

Our souls desire deep
conversations.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Notes:
Never boo one
that makes fun
with puns.
It only turns
them on.

There is much more to Wallflowers than the pun. The metaphors are drawn as much from the images of Janis Ian's song At Seventeen as they are the reference to John's classic line.

And those of us with ravaged faces
Lacking in the social graces
Desperately remained at home
Inventing lovers on the phone
Who called to say come dance with me
And murmured vague obscenities
It isn't all it seems
At seventeen

http://www.janisian.com/lyrics/At%20Seventeen.pdf

Conversations is about the way love can take us to deeper levels where we find our selves reflected in that experience.

I hope you enjoyed them both.





Submitted on 2006-09-16 13:15:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow all of this was verry intresting to read. I liked how the first one conved so many thoughts and brought back so much from my past which i always thinks makes a poem or any writting better. I liked the secound one alot as well, the message you convey through this is so true though i rarly see mentioned in any writting. I loved the way you brought out this message in this piece. Also i have to say i loved your short poem about puns becouse it truly made me smile becouse my faimly puns a lot and nothing makes it worse than when you try to tell them it wa bad for they just make more. That truly made me smile. All of these although very diffrent were amazing to read and i am glad that i got the chance to read them. Great work keep it up!
| Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
  When I read the first poem, I gather war to be the glamorus woman the men are trying to dance with and peace is the dance the wallflowers, family or friends of a person fighting a war, waiting for their return. As for the second one, I gathered it was about love on a deeper level, but read the notes to make sure. lol. Both are very good. Completely different, but compliment eachother. I'm surprised there was no comment for this. Great work Chyrstine!

Catrina
| Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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