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    dots Submission Name: Two Thoughts - One Daydots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 306
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       These were written within minutes of each other. They are saying different things , but sping from the same source.


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    dotsTwo Thoughts - One Daydots
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    We are the wallflowers
    Waiting, wondering,
    And weeping

    Watching the men
    Waltzing with war
    They love to be seen
    With her on their arm
    But they will never know
    A truly secure home
    Unless they are willing
    To give peace a dance

    We are the wallflowers
    Waiting, wondering,
    And weeping

    Our peace lacks the glamour
    Or celebrity of war
    And therefore often
    gets ignored.
    But can make you happy
    Given half a chance
    All we are saying is
    Give peace a dance

    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    Conversations

    There is a language of love
    that has no words and no touch
    except for a gaze that carries
    light to the depth of the well
    and reflects on the smooth surface
    of sweet water.

    What is seen
    is that which is looking.
    I pray that we may
    communicate
    in that way
    today.

    Our souls desire deep
    conversations.

    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    Notes:
    Never boo one
    that makes fun
    with puns.
    It only turns
    them on.

    There is much more to Wallflowers than the pun. The metaphors are drawn as much from the images of Janis Ian's song At Seventeen as they are the reference to John's classic line.

    And those of us with ravaged faces
    Lacking in the social graces
    Desperately remained at home
    Inventing lovers on the phone
    Who called to say come dance with me
    And murmured vague obscenities
    It isn't all it seems
    At seventeen

    http://www.janisian.com/lyrics/At%20Seventeen.pdf

    Conversations is about the way love can take us to deeper levels where we find our selves reflected in that experience.

    I hope you enjoyed them both.





    Submitted on 2006-09-16 13:15:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow all of this was verry intresting to read. I liked how the first one conved so many thoughts and brought back so much from my past which i always thinks makes a poem or any writting better. I liked the secound one alot as well, the message you convey through this is so true though i rarly see mentioned in any writting. I loved the way you brought out this message in this piece. Also i have to say i loved your short poem about puns becouse it truly made me smile becouse my faimly puns a lot and nothing makes it worse than when you try to tell them it wa bad for they just make more. That truly made me smile. All of these although very diffrent were amazing to read and i am glad that i got the chance to read them. Great work keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      When I read the first poem, I gather war to be the glamorus woman the men are trying to dance with and peace is the dance the wallflowers, family or friends of a person fighting a war, waiting for their return. As for the second one, I gathered it was about love on a deeper level, but read the notes to make sure. lol. Both are very good. Completely different, but compliment eachother. I'm surprised there was no comment for this. Great work Chyrstine!

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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