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    dots Submission Name: ???dots

    Author: Dolor
    ASL Info:    21/m
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 129/158/79
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Kind of like a prologue then it flows into the real thing. Something I made a while ago and I edited a few things to make it sound better and hopefully a little more sense, despite how crazy it sounds.

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    Scope the very air
    Inbetween the very crack!
    Create a vision...


    Whirlpool fantasia
    In midst of an earthquake
    Raging rippling eyes!

    Whirlwind eyes..
    Swirling, without form,
    Dazing the mind.

    Hypnotizing irregularity
    Aforethought agenda
    Blueprint plague.


    Lazy dreams, lazy dreams
    It comes down to
    imperial schemes
    Shattered ice, slice the fire
    The path of the innocent
    Is one to desire


    Tradegy, it cuts the bleeding heart.
    Life's story: tears a world apart;
    Mending void if mirage supports.
    Visionless supports the senses still

    Will it be the end..?
    Ending need not a meaning; results of
    A new darkness, a bleak existance,
    A double-dealing.

    Soft sparkling remains of hope
    Soar from living to death
    The rest to wither without regret.

    Settling the particles of grace
    Under coiled fantasies
    If liking to uncoil fateful lace
    Combining twice under the power
    of stars; a melodic rhapsody.

    Remember what must!
    Leave this earth! Turn to dust!
    Collapse in the ad infinitum craze
    Cling to the Memorial of
    the good old days.

    Submitted on 2006-09-16 13:18:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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