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Submission Name: It happened dots

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Author:	dreamer37517
ASL Info:	21/F/Bama
Elite Ratio:	3.83 - 155/142/46
Words:	116

Class/Type:	Poetry/Satire
Total Views:	256
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	724

Description:
I guess this kind of an anger rant.
I wrote this because my best friend and I were having a huge fight. She has to choose if she still wants to be my friend or just end our friendship.

It happened dots

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I followed my heart,
You tear it apart.
So life is a joke,
And now I am broke.

You feel betrayed,
I feel afraid.
I want you two both,
I did not break oath.

I’m not in the wrong,
So hear my sad song
You make it unfair,
You seem not to care.

I can’t change the past,
It happened so fast.
But I just can’t quit,
I won’t take your shit.

You want it your way,
There’s nothing to say.
You know you can deal,
That’s how we all feel.

You’re still my best friend,
We’re friends till the end.
It’s now up to you,
So what will you do?

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  I agree partly with porcelaine - this is a simple poem but for me - why not? We can't always delve into the fabric of our souls and expound something deeply profound. We should do both. Thank you I enjoyed this.

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| Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
  Something similar along the line happened to me not too long ago, which is why it hit me somewhere. Do agree that it's kind of simple. Still, the sadness and disappoinment felt is heart-wrenching. Don't know what happened your end, but my own personal issues aren't solved either. So, I just happen upon this piece at the right time. Anyway, keep it up. ^_^

P/s: Sorry about the earlier 'blank' critique. Don't know why I can't seem to edit or delete it.
| Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by whchong | [ Reply to This ]

| Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by whchong | [ Reply to This ]
  It' just a bit too simple. I mean the idea is clear and all but it's just too simple, that's all.
| Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]

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