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    dots Submission Name: I'll Cut My Teeth on Leaddots
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    Author: honus
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 90/96/32
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI'll Cut My Teeth on Leaddots
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    Sergeants lined them up.
    A cue that led to
    a promise,
    and we all know
    what promises are worth.

    Nothing
    can be said of them.
    They aren’t worth
    description.
    The sun, bitten by clouds,
    refused to paint their features.

    It was a strain
    Just to peer down
    into the courtyard
    and comb their faces,
    proofread emotion
    capitalize Anger
    edit conviction.

    I could vaguely see
    their lips moving,
    offering up words
    to a god somewhere
    above them
    possibly
    across the hall
    in room 902

    The gun barrels
    didn’t hate them
    nor the soldiers
    whose hands
    prayed to different deities
    right fingers outstretched
    left palms turned to heaven
    bracing recoil springs.

    I never heard the crack
    of gunfire, just saw the smoke
    jump out
    as the they crumbled
    before the wall.

    I hope their shoes
    were laced with cyanide,
    that the fluid in their veins
    was explosive,
    that somehow their breath
    was poisonous,
    and by stopping them
    we are all safer,

    you, me, the film crew
    and god in room 902
    editing our dailies
    across the hall.




    Submitted on 2006-09-16 19:55:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hm....interesting..im thinking as if it was during the shooting of a movie..but that doesnt make sense..maybe footae shot during a war that is being edites or sometihng at a news studio...sometihng along those lines...I thought it was really unique..the only thing I may suggest is capitalizing God..some people could have ur back for that...u know..thy'd be mad..other than that..really enjoyed it..i'll add it to my favs...
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]



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