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    dots Submission Name: Gonedots
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    Author: Ali Marie
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 104/106/76
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 186
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsGonedots
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    You're gone and there's nothing I can do,
    but relive everything we went through.
    You said you'd come back to our spot,
    I guess it wasn't important, because you forgot.
    the promises were broken and fell to the floor,
    these wounds they will not heal like before.
    i'm coping slowly yet i still miss you,
    letting go seems long overdue.
    I can't come to terms with the fact,
    you're gone and you won't be back.
    I'm lost in the past trying to bring back what's dead,
    I don't know what i could have done or said,
    to convince you that you should remain,
    i wish this wasn't all in vain.
    please come back and give me one more chance,
    give me one more night, just one more dance.




    Submitted on 2006-09-16 19:58:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really injoyed reading this. Very deep with great emotion. I felt like this before, when something you love leaves you it's just really hard to get over.
    Keep up the good writing hun,
    -Jenny
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Another excellent poem, it sounds alot like what I have been going through, check out some of my poems, I think you will relate to them. Dean
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      i added it to my favs list
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by vencix | [ Reply to This ]


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