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    dots Submission Name: Heavensent memoriesdots

    Author: Ali Marie
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 105/106/76
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHeavensent memoriesdots

    memories of the love that was here,
    i hold everything close that was sincere.
    I believe in angels, though appearances are rare.
    They are golden answers to a modest prayer.
    one came to me in my deepest time of need,
    I knew that moment God had heard my plea.
    he drifted in and made my life worth living,
    yet time was destined to be unforgiving.
    unforgettable love fulfilled my dreams,
    the magic took my soul and broke it free.
    the mystique that we came to remember,
    was ours till the end of September.
    when it ended my heart was only debris,
    I'll never leave behind your memory.
    A blessing, this love was meant to be true.
    i believe in angels because of you.
    heaven's smiling in remembrance of us
    memories will never be enough.

    Submitted on 2006-09-16 20:00:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Creative use of end-rhymes> I liked that the poem related to 9/11 but didn't come out and say as much. This was gentle & while I believe it could be tightened up technically I think the emotion that comes through is what counts.

    A lovely Rememberance.


    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by Leinad Wolrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice poem, I feel the heartbreak in it, very much like my last relationship.
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]

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