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    dots Submission Name: A Dreamdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsA Dreamdots
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    The hours go by and I am still here,
    Missing you,
    It is like vice that is keeping me here,
    Every night thinking about you.

    And when the sun sets I,
    can't help to imagine you are with me,
    feeling I can't make it if you are not here,
    As we begin to kiss in the car,
    just wishing I wouldn't wake up from that,
    but reality comes and brings me back.

    It was just a dream,
    and you are still not here,
    It was just a dream,
    and you are still not here.

    In the morning hugging the pillow is how I wake up,
    I am not aware of what's a dream or not,
    Soon to find out that it was my imagination,
    Just shivering and shuddering every time your name is mentioned.

    You just don't know,
    how much I miss you,
    and how it hurts me,
    a week turns into a month,
    and a month into a year,
    What I would give,
    just to see you once more,
    rather than to just be dreaming about it.

    And when the sun sets I,
    can't help to imagine you are with me,
    feeling I can't make it if you are not here,
    As we begin to kiss in the car,
    just wishing I wouldn't wake up from that,
    but reality comes and brings me back.

    It was just a dream,
    and you are still not here,
    It was just a dream,
    and you are still not here.

    The hours go by and I am still here,
    Missing you,
    It is like vice that is keeping me here,
    Every night thinking about you.




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      This is a good write. Filled with torturous emotion and feelings and I have been here myself. The heart has a way of not forgetting the good and the bad and hangs on tight to memories. When you lose a relationship for whatever reason, it is hard, especially when you have deep feelings for the person. Dreams have a way of torturing the soul. You have no control over them and they can be so vivid and realistic that the disappointment when you wake up just ruins the whole day. This is well written and expressed. You allow the reader to really feel the pain and recall their own experiences. Good write.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was good with a good feel and great emotion. I realy really liked the 5th stanza, it felt the most powerful to me. greatwrite
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by samyalone | [ Reply to This ]


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