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    dots Submission Name: A.M.dots

    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    68/M/Sooke/ B.C./Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 138/106/35
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       The coffees perkin and this just came to mind.

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    The shades of morning drawn,
    The dawn, awakens yet
    Another day.
    Rudely the rooster crows
    To beckon
    A red horizon
    To his coop
    While I hover over sizzling bacon
    And bemoan
    The yellow yolk
    As it breaks
    In the too hot pan
    As another day glides softly
    Into being......

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      You have a wonderful style! In my humble opinion some of the very best poems result from simple observations...and you are obviously observant. In addition to well-done yolks, you have well-done verse! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-10-31 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      this is nice...very refreshing. a brand new day to look foward to. i liked the part about the egg yolk best too, that made me smile to myself..we've all been there!
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed reading about the start of a new day with the rooster crowing. You took me back to my childhood when I lived on and around farms. A pleasant and enjoyable read, Peggy
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      A wonderful beginning of the day. I'm envious. If you could package it, put it is a box, and pop it out of the toaster, you'd get rich. But then you'd lose the freshness. Thanks for reminding me that there is a different morning if I live it.
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by feather | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice internal rhyme with drawn/dawn.

    Rudely the rooster crows
    To beckon
    A red horizon
    To his coop

    Nice description here. the imagery is fresh and lovely.

    My favorite part of the poem was the remainder because of the way the broken yoke symbolizes the sunlight and a new day. Also, it's golden that the yoke breaks. Life isn't perfect and I hate it when that happens I'm glad you put it down on paper.

    A lovely poem with some inspired ideas.

    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by Leinad Wolrab | [ Reply to This ]

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