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    dots Submission Name: Spiritdots
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    Author: takenspiritwind
    ASL Info:    21/F/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 117/95/38
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 871
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 401



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       Need some help with this one...it's about a year old and needs some help!


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    dotsSpiritdots
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    So false this hope that I fell back to earth,
    so true this lie that has broken my spirit.
    From dawn untill dusk I hide in the shadows
    watching, waiting.
    I wish that my spirit mend and come back to free me.
    Time and space cease to exist, as black hours adorn my chained spirit.
    Holding on too tightly I wish not to let go, but I must.




    Submitted on 2006-09-16 21:29:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Pretty good, I like it. It would've flowed better if it rhymed, but if this is your personal writing style and you prefer not to rhyme, that's fine, too. Nothing's better than creativity.
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]


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