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    dots Submission Name: A Humble Prayerdots
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    Author: Ari Leukos
    ASL Info:    17/Male/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.92 - 92/129/44
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 120
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    Bytes: 690



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       A poem that sounds of a little antiquity... eh?


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    dotsA Humble Prayerdots
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    O', let it be that I should never lack the sense
    To not speak when I would seem better silent
    And let me never be in want of forgiveness
    Even when a wrong is done with no repent

    May I not laugh when voices rise and tears are shed
    Nor I seem dour in the shining of a summer's day
    But be calm, composed, and loving still
    Not letting thoughts be, inside my head, betrayed

    O', let it be that I should never pass on by
    The way where so many friends and foes did fall
    Not abandon them, though they would me
    Not care for what a meagre price I stall

    This by Your will I pray.




    Submitted on 2006-09-16 23:39:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really don't know why no one has commented on this yet, but maybe because they didn't think they had anything worthwhile to say about it to improve it or whatever... and I almost didn't comment either, because I feel the same, but Oh well, that would be boring. As usual I really like it because you bring to attention ideas and things a lot of people go through...or, at least myself, and present them in a way that is clear and poetic in that Ari way. Not much else to say except for...I shall need to meditate upon it for awhile... Good.

    I also enjoy the word 'dour'. Dour. Yummy.

    Your Friend, Lucy
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]


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