Description: I thought of something to write about finally, and when I got going I was on one of those classic rolls you come across in writing. This peace goes on and on- this is just one part. Enjoy.
-Q
Edit- the line spare one of your rods when it comes to your wife should be taken as make love to your wife but never hit her.
Life is a Game -------------------------------------------
Here’s a couple tips I’ve picked up in my time:
Coffee tastes better in an oversized cup
Meatballs taste shitty when you first wake up
M & M’s melt in your mouth, hand, or pocket
Your car will be robbed
It’s useless to lock it
Don’t drink without smoking
Don’t smoke without drinking
Don’t even try joking
If you’re not good at thinking
When you’re debating a point it’s poor to shout
Don’t fear to throw fists when there’s no way out
Don’t speak of a story to someone who’s heard it
Don’t accept an “I’m sorry”
If you don’t deserve it
If you don’t give head
And you’re not good at lying
You’re far better off dead
Better get on with dying
Your skinniest friends may well smoke crack
Most people you love don’t love you back
There’s a time to live stupid and a time to have fun
If you want to have children
Stop acting like one
And most importantly...
Spare one of your rods
When it comes to your wife
There are many gods
There’s no afterlife
And if you want to succeed
Learn to love, fuck, and fight
From the moment you’re grown
To the long kiss goodnight.
i thought this was really good kinda funny yet sad and true at the same time i like some of the things mentioned and realize how true they are this is a good write i wish i saw more like it i think i shall go look at your other poems and see if i can find any that i can relate to thanks for commenting on The Barrren Wastelands Of A Darkened Mind
~blood~
This....wow....it's gotta be one of the most humorous poems I have read in awhile or ever for that matter. I don't know how you came up with that one, but it has a rhyme, rhythm, everything that makes a rhyming poem good.
I can definitely relate to it tho....I think we all get told things like that when were kids....sometimes even now I get told a few of those things by parents or friends. It gets old real quick. This was a nice way of putting it though...a different view. lol ~Strator
oh this is very cute yet tru and sad because it is true..heh ^___^'' but yea i guess i can say i like it very much... my favorite lines were--
"Don’t speak of a story to someone who’s heard it Don’t accept an “I’m sorry” If you don’t deserve it" && "There’s a time to live stupid and a time to have fun If you want to have children Stop acting like one"
so thank u again for a nice reminder of what life can be &&& of coarse for living & sharing the experiences so maybe i wont have to!
I can't help but keep smiling line after line. I find this an entertaining piece. I do find some truths in most of your tips. Guess what I like most is the way you put them. From a different perspective, things look harsh. Despite being blunt, you make things look light. Enjoyed reading it. ^_^
I found this entertaining. The flow is pretty good but could be improved and I'm sure you'll find the places if you spend enough time in the poem. This had the potential to be taken as a joke (and parts of it were funny) but I think there are a lots of elements to this that offer more.
Hey, Life rule book, you should write it. These are all so true and that makes the poem realistic. You're very good at rhyming and forming sensible sentences. I just don't like one thing: 'Spare one of your rods 'When it comes to your wife , that one actually disgusts me.
Some of this is pretty blunt, maybe so emotionally driven that you don't mean it. I agree that the wife remark was a little crude, however although I may not fully agree with everything you say I can agree with the emotions that come with the mood of being fed up with life in general.
Submission Name: Life is a Game
