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    dots Submission Name: Love's Unrequited Paradoxicitydots

    Author: arkayye
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 69/109/51
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1137
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       a co-write with TBPurdue, thanks man for that great exercise in collaboration.

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    dotsLove's Unrequited Paradoxicitydots


    Love of the unrequited type...
    Ah! How paradoxical it be!
    Even more paradoxical
    Than that of the returned type...

    return to me my boomerang
    if ironic paradox be
    bring on your wings an offering
    return to set this captive free

    Love is love whether returned or not.

    It gives all meaning to life,
    But when not returned
    It drives us into insanity!
    Constantly contemplating
    Upon what may or may not be...

    provide a reason, supply a rhyme
    keep despair exiled forever
    to hearts a breathe of gentle clime
    elixir to heart's endeavour

    If you have not experienced
    This type of love,
    This unrequited love
    Then you shall not understand
    The joyous part.
    You will think it all tragic.
    But there is a joyous part!

    you freely give from joyous grace
    once prisoner of love withheld
    escape on wings of kiss' embrace
    receive twin souls, tender fire meld

    Love is love whether returned or not.

    my need reaches to the heavens
    despaired reply from there to find
    where is that spark this chest quickens
    love without truth is love unkind

    Whether that person feels the same or not,
    I still love her, and to have someone
    That I love so much,
    Brings certain joy unto me...
    But certain grief to not recieve the love in return...

    It is the most tragic grief
    And the most joyous joy
    At the same time!

    Love, paradox of paradoxes!


    Submitted on 2006-09-17 04:25:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is the most tragic grief
    And the most joyous joy
    At the same time!

    Great collaboration. Hope to see more some time.
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by arkayye | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good! I loved eveything except the last line, it did not work for me. I loved how ou told of the joy in just loving even if it is not returned to you. That is one of the wisest things to know in life. I loved the rhyme scheme and the flow. I loved your wording as well. Almost Old English. Nice work!

    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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