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    dots Submission Name: Umbradots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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    dotsUmbradots
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    Vengance grew inside this soil
    You cannot condemn this dream
    Bleak of mind, your sky uncoil
    Trap your heart inside your scream

    How do you as blind of eye
    Find a wraith beside her thorns
    Seeking shallow through the dark
    Where in devil's grave she mourns

    Quiet worlds through gardens bloom
    Hiding into blood and dew
    Pouring to the shadow stream
    Dusk of souls in which she grew

    Thread aside perdition tame
    Chasm of misguided ones
    Single rose within her reign
    Watch for death for here she comes






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      Umbra. Something vaguely related to shadow I think. So I like the title.
    I also love this stanza alot :

    Vengance grew inside this soil
    You cannot condemn this dream
    Bleak of mind, your sky uncoil
    Trap your heart inside your scream


    To me it's just a pure expression of absolute fear, very dark, very wonderful, and the entire piece just speaks to me about fearing death.
    I'm not too sure what unknown soldier said, I don't sense a blind person anywhereabouts..
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      How do you as blind of eye
    Find a wraith beside her thorns

    those were my favorite lines because of the irony of a blind person being able to find the good things in life. which i think the wraith represents. this seems like the flow would kinda be like a chant that u could tell to little kids at a bonfire. cool stuff.
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Umbra- isn't that the darkest part of a shadow?


    I am not sure what you have here but I do have a few ideas. death comes to mind
    Even with that said
    the word vengance sits off this write as something powerful and not to be taken lightly.


    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]


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