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Author: Rain
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This is a write for my English class...any imput on this would be great appriciated!



Dear Liars,
Who do you think you are to twist these stories? You open your mouth and all that comes out are fabrications. One word after another, sentence after sentence…but in actuality, it’s just one story followed by another. Do you ever stop to wonder who you’re hurting or do you even care? Is there a conscience inside you; from what I can tell, there can’t be.

I want to know, have you forgotten about the line of morality? When children are young, they are taught to never even tell a white lie. Did you miss those lessons, were your ears not open, or did it they just escape you?

Do your stories, these lies; do they start out innocent, minor? Are they never supposed to grow or do you tell so many that you have to create bigger ones to cover your ass?

You say your lies are to protect others from getting hurt; you think just because they might not fully comprehend the truth, that they don’t deserve to know it. Or is that you think they can’t handle it? So you make up these stories, you wrap them around the necks of those you can’t look in the eyes and say straight up what the hell’s going on. Do you realize that your discrepancies kill apart of you and those that you’ve infected with them? Can you honestly say that you don’t care…honesty, now that’s a novel thought.

Do you have a book that helps you keep track of what you told who, or can you keep it all straight in your head? Or do you just keep building on things until you don’t even know up from down? Have you lost yourself in these stories you create, do you even know who you are anymore? Can you remember where you are and where you came from, or is it all just one big blur?

They say we have the freedom of speech, I wonder if this what they meant?

Submitted on 2006-09-17 14:48:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I know you don't give a [censored] damn about the hell I'm gonna say, but since we still are on a comment sharing site, I'll put aside all the arguing we had, and [censored] like that. So here is what I think in all honesty. The piece was awesome, your emotion really showed up on this one, I'm not telling you I like the fact that you were mad about it, but I just wanted to say how much it stained on the poem, a beautiful choice of words, just like a bunch of longspears attacking all those liar in the world... Which would mean the entire population... Anyway, I have to say it, I know this poem was targetting me and Jess, but I want to appologies for all we said, this thing went so far, I'm not waiting for any response, or at least nothing positive I suppose, nor I wait for forgiveness, I said what I had to say, and did I good review on your work. I wish you all you can hope for.

| Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by Gothik | [ Reply to This ]
  this is amazing, i love it. it's so true and so emotional. i don't believe i've seen anything from you on eliteskills in a long time. nice to see you back.
| Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, this sounds really mad... What kinda thing is it suppose to be for your class? I don't really know what to say about this other then it sounds really angery at people and lies.
| Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

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