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    dots Submission Name: Purpose of Lifedots

    Author: ChrystalR
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126/121/58
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsPurpose of Lifedots

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    The true purpose of life
    Makes about as much sense
    As the essence of love
    Through a painted lens

    Humans walk dimly about
    Without the merest clue
    That even when we die out
    Heaven will still stay blue

    In the mind of the dust
    From four fallen stars
    On the blanket they trust
    And the angels of Mars

    Dreaming of a fate more vast
    In between the many miracles
    Between the future and past
    Time walks so satirical
    On a path anciently cast

    A child, born and raised
    Growing up like the others before
    The circle already phrased
    But as it is written once more
    Every beginning proves a waste

    There is really nothing there
    If you look past your illusion
    Life is a road, which ends here
    An eternity of others allusion

    Submitted on 2006-09-17 20:55:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm...is this write saying that there is no purpose to life, or that believing you have a purpose is to live in denial of reality?

    I'm not sure what the last line means.

    I often ponder on the meaning of life, if there is one, other than to survive. I think our lives are meaningful if we always strive to do what really makes us feel alive. Everyone needs something to look forward to, in order to want to get out of bed every day...well, at least that's the way I feel about my life. All religion and philosophy has failed me thus far.

    -Heaven will still stay blue

    I'm not sure what this line means. Are you saying heaven is merely the sky, or was it put there because it fit nicely into the rhyming scheme?

    What are the four fallen stars?

    I found this to be a rather thoughtful write. You seem to be somewhat tortured as I. lol

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