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    dots Submission Name: Just One Daydots
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    Author: MorbidAngel114
    ASL Info:    20/f/Behind you
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 445/480/114
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 798
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 541



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       I don't care if this isn't good, but it's how I truly feel...


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    dotsJust One Daydots
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    For just one day,
    let you and I
    Be together again
    Let our trouble fall away

    Create a haven,
    out of chaos
    Just slip away and hide

    Baby can I ask you,
    To take me somewhere safe?
    Take me somewhere far away
    Where troubles cannot follow

    Pain, Suffering, Sorrow
    Melted away in our eyes
    Our Heaven on earth,
    Has finally found us

    At least for the day
    Let the world melt away
    Just you and I together




    Submitted on 2006-09-17 21:04:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Awwww. I wish he could come home and take you away from everything. *Smiles* I'm glad you have someone like this, little sister. Makes me happy to know you're happy in the world. *HUGS*

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    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      Iím not sure why no one has commented on this piece yet.
    I thought it delivered a peaceful mindset, and painted you a beautiful scenario.
    It sounds like lyrics, have you thought about transforming it into a song?
    If not and you would rather leave it as a poem, might I suggest you be a tad more elaborate.
    Good write though.
    | Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]


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