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    dots Submission Name: give my soul to artdots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 344
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1402
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2072



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       this is another one of my collaborations with my self.


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    dotsgive my soul to artdots
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    (unknown soldier)
    This gangsta rap is a conundrum
    “Real niggas” claiming their guns sung
    But it’s our kids making sure that their funds come
    So they turn into role models as we become undone
    Trying to get my people to come up
    Our society’s summed up
    By hustlers pushing work from sun down to sun up
    Death’s indecisive like a gladiator waiting for the thumbs down or thumbs up
    Stick up kids hold the gun to you when they run up
    Itching to take the grip from your fingers
    Putting Death’s kiss to your lips and it lingers
    And ghetto birds give more vocals than singers
    We turn into ringers as we try to bring a
    Release from this captivity
    I rap vividly to bring hope to kids who laugh timidly
    Growing up solemn
    Nothing but problems
    So at age 16 he’s hitting rock bottom
    Now he’s gone and forgotten
    Because either the cops got him
    Or them brothers on the block shot him
    Decomposing in somebody’s trunk or locked in a cell rotting
    Our way of life is rapidly toppling…

    (Anonimous)
    And I’m on corners pop locking and beat boxing
    Lasting 15 rounds so I gotta keep boxing
    At Opportunity’s door and I’m a keep knocking
    Til that bitch opens and I win the grand prize in game tokens
    The lames are hoping that they’ll get up and walk
    Cuz the money and fame left em broken until they’re on the pavement outlined in chalk
    The haters, they talk
    And words break bones
    Leaving tooth-marks on your skin from the bite of their bark
    Emerging from shadows to attack from the dark
    Rusting Iron Men like Tony Stark
    To get to your flesh and tear out your phony heart
    Trying to bring fire when I only spark
    And those resistant to the flames will be there to tear your bones apart
    Giving my all from close to start
    Hip hop needs life
    So in death I’m prepared to give my soul to art





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      ok!! finally! this my friend is really REALLY REALLY 100X good!!! really its a fav!! cuz i really like it! hold on!! i aint even gonna try to do a write with 2 diffrent sides of me!! that aint gonna work i think ur da only person u can do that!! um........ lemme think was there anything else?????!! um... i have a headache thats y i didnt call!!! sry!!! o ya everyone is right everytime u write something it gets more mature and LONGER heehe and more filled wit depth! awww troy is growin up w/ da challeneges with life! thats so cute!! this is a REALLY LONG comment! sry my friends were loud today!! were kinda still immature! unlike u!! actually u have a lil point in immaturity bcz u are WAY WAY WAY TO SACARSTIC! but its funny so it works! does that make sense?? w/e im done good job!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz, hope all is good wit u, i loved this one with every one u write it keeps getting deeper and the meaning is getting more powerfull, keep em cummin
    kyrenia x x x
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      I some how missed this one! I'm glad i searched for you writings :)....yes, yes i admit it I look for them sometimes :)...anyway I loved this one I agree with Mag i liked the first virse more was, i dont know, ...tighter <that make sense?> Anyway nice work.

    AL

    by the way i promise never to critique drunk again :)
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      i wish i could collaborate with myself lol. This was cool though. Damn it's been a minute since i've commented something you wrote. But yea i can tell how much you've grown as a rapper from when i first came to this site till now. I think we all have.

    Lady D
    | Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      the insight was on point. you describe the world today with the same points of view that i can relate too and recognize. The ending lines were sick...

    Nice read and drop..

    keep it up

    PC
    | Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Say, I liked that.... Especially the last few lines in your verse... Not bad at all.. Still see you got it going on
    | Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, well well...this wasvery good. Your lyrics seem more mature these days and speak alot more about what goes on in the world. I liked the first part better, because you were more focused on speaking truth and not standing out with mad rhymes as in the second one. Although, I did like the first few lines to your alter ego. Good flow and very creative with the metaphors. Way to go Candyman!

    Magtrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hey hey, this is catchy babe! im likin it, and it is so true wot ur saying, society is changing, kids are growing up too fast, but they do it to protect themselves, its hard, but this is inspiring,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia x
    | Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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