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    dots Submission Name: Roses Of December Falldots
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    Author: Jingles
    ASL Info:    19.m.canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18/60/36
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 742
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I just want opinions.I know It's not my best work ever but It's what I was feeling tonight.


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    dotsRoses Of December Falldots
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    Puddles of crimson,Veins of silk
    Lips of deciet,Heart full of guilt
    Holding her back,Weighing her down
    Life I now shattered,Will never be found
    Green eyes full of pain,Pain that I've caused
    I should have cut deeper,Before our paths crossed
    She can still be saved,From the darkness inside
    The creation of anguish,I've been trying to hide
    Now's my chance to save her,Save her from me
    Save her from the nightmare,I let my first love see
    This thin metal blade,I press into my wrist
    It's been such a long time,And is constantly missed
    The blood bubbles up,And cascades to the ground
    The ground my casket,Should be resting under now
    Yet again my mind ,Slips into the frost
    I close my eyes tightly,As more blood is lost
    I did it for you,I saved you from me
    The whispers were right,This burden is free
    Time goes on,You'll love again
    As these Roses Of December fall




    Submitted on 2006-09-18 04:46:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I decided to look into more of your work and I'm glad I did. It's so beautiful. The imagery is vivid and the way you've written the words is so different.
    Reading your poetry makes me feel as though I have found an oasis in a dying wasteland.
    The Conqueror
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]


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