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    dots Submission Name: Jamie Oliver got me fired up like an oven.dots
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    Author: poison-oak
    ASL Info:    14/m/countryside
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 1/1/2
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
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    dotsJamie Oliver got me fired up like an oven.dots
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    My dinnerlady told me,
    she can't hand out salt.
    So I might sell it at a high price,
    to fat, 11 year old kids.

    My foolish teachers perch,
    on dirty plastic chairs,
    grinning and pretending that,
    they actually enjoy their food,
    freezing cold.

    Soup, seventy five pence,
    polystyrene cup looks,
    more appetising than,
    its watery, red contents.

    Burgers, chips, grease gone,
    nothing left in it's place.
    Now I'm left with,
    a horrible lingering taste,
    of bitterness.

    And I never even liked junk food.
    But I'm the victim.




    Submitted on 2006-09-18 15:30:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I take it you don't like your school's food? I think you could clarify just a bit, when read aloud you trip up reading it--I did anyway--
    | Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by causticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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